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Reviewer: Khyrie Signed
Date: 26/06/05 Title: Chapter 2: Doomed
I really like the concept and story, but the grammar needs some work. I'd like to read this after it's been proofread and updated. Unfortunately, I couldn't make it past the second chapter because of all the errors. I admit I'm an ESL teacher, so that probably makes me more sensitive than usual.