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Eighteen Days by Elen starstarstarstarstar [ - ]
Chapter One--A Cautionary Tale of World Save-age. It isn't NC-17 yet, but I thought I'd better make it NC-17 to be on the safe side. All of the email addresses used for Willow, her friends and parents were made up for this story. Please don?t use them!
Willow/Spike
Characters: Spike, Willow - Genres: Action/Adventure, Romance - Rating: NC-17 - Warnings: Spoilers for BtVS S2, Spoilers for BtVS S3, Spoilers for BtVS S1 - Chapters: 33
Published: 30/01/04 - Updated: 10/10/04 - Completed: No

Reviewer: Sara Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: 15/04/04 Title: Chapter 20: Twenty-One

I'm impressed. Lots of lengthy updates. Yaay! This is a good installment. The first part with Oz's mom actually made me cry, and I don't do that. It was so real and touching and sad all at once. Oz's family has never really been explored in anything I've seen or read, so it was a good fleshing out of a sketchy, well, sketch. So real. Spike and Willow were nice,although I did have trouble keeping the image as arms and legs moved since I didn't have a solid starting place. I never know what side of the bed we're on, which side arm or leg is moving, so sometimes I guess wrong and wind up with seriously impossible scenarios and have to back up and start it again using a different side of the body, etc. But it is good. The other part that I thought was excllent was Angel and Harmony. A timy little scene, but very real to me, and interesting. I always like when Angel deals with very weak vampires in his alpha male way - it's an aspect of his personality that is very interesting to me. Thanks for the update, and this wonderful story. Valkyrn

Author's Response: Oz's Mom was a late add to the chapter. I know exactly where she lived and what she does for a living. She was just one of those characters that pop into your head with a whole life. Thanks for pointing out that I need to keep working on orientation. I have a feeling that Harmony could run away with a story if you let her. She's at a very interesting shape her into whatever you want place. Thanks again for the detailed feedback! I've got a little more of this to post, and then I think Eighteen Days will be on a short vacation so I can work on Odalisque more.

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Reviewer: Sara Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: 28/04/04 Title: Chapter 22: Chapter Twenty-Three

Thrilled beyond measure with the last two chapters. I spent the whole last chapter wondering where each conversation was going now - and enjoyed it immensely. Again, it's the little details, the little nuances that are so appealing. Georgia's digression, Cole Porter, the walk, the shoes, all the little pieces. Willow's observation that she was sure Oz liked her for being nice, and since Spike wouldn't have the same opinion, what was the attraction anyway? Such a sad opinion of herself. Oh! and the mascara in the girl's restroom in high school. I could totally see Buffy and Willow doing that. Great little moment. Thanks again.

Author's Response: I hope that you look forward to my chapters half as much as I look forward to your feedback. It's so neat to see someone pick out the little things that I hope work. Thanks!

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Reviewer: Sara Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: 29/04/04 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter One

Aw, sweet. I want to point out also that the sex-for-the-lives-of-her-friends plotline is wonderful, and I have full faith in you that you won't forget that part or wimp out on it or anything. The drama, the angst, the potential for misunderstanding and betrayal! I'm not telling you what tack to take, but I am looking forward to seeing something done with this, whatever you wind up choosing. It's the thread in the tapestry you're weaving that pulls me along with you through all the wonderful details. Thank you for the story. And it is my current favorite WIP. :-)

Author's Response: I don't want to get spoilerish, so if you want to talk about the unposted/unwritten parts of this story, please feel free to email me directly.

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Reviewer: Sara Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: 02/05/04 Title: Chapter 23: Chapter Twenty-Four

Well, for my part I think Denny's is the worst restaurant ever, and had to agree with the pancake choice as breakfast is really the only meal that is remotely edible there. And they are all over the west, so that's realistic. Love the chapter, especially the the two scenes where Willow was trying to cover her behavior, and Spike's suspicions but unable to figure it out. Thanks for this one, and keep em coming! I look every day for your updates. :-)

Author's Response: Thank you! This may be our second trip to Denny's. I think Oz visited one earlier. I'd really love to do something where we discover that Denny's really is the seventh level of hell and the whole gang shows up to save the people inside. Frisch's all night buffet is fun, but Denny's has a demon-y edge to it.

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Reviewer: Sara Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: 09/05/04 Title: Chapter 24: Chapter Twenty-Five

As I read this particular installment, I found myself reminded of a much loved poem by WH Auden, Musee des Beaux Arts: "About suffering they were never wrong, The Old Masters; how well, they understood Its human position; how it takes place While someone else is eating or opening a window or just walking dully along; How, when the aged are reverently, passionately waiting For the miraculous birth, there always must be Children who did not specially want it to happen, skating On a pond at the edge of the wood: They never forgot That even the dreadful martyrdom must run its course Anyhow in a corner, some untidy spot Where the dogs go on with their doggy life and the torturer's horse Scratches its innocent behind on a tree. In Breughel's Icarus, for instance: how everything turns away Quite leisurely from the disaster; the ploughman may Have heard the splash, the forsaken cry, But for him it was not an important failure; the sun shone As it had to on the white legs disappearing into the green Water; and the expensive delicate ship that must have seen Something amazing, a boy falling out of the sky, had somewhere to get to and sailed calmly on." The certainty that Willow had, that her friends were on their way to her rescue, that she shaved and moisturized and planned how to react when they arrived, it was all so sad in counterpoint to what her friends were actually doing, their utter cluelessness. And her boss, Sara! (loved the student loan moment, by the way LOL). Just how the world goes on round, in spite of our suffering,even among those we know and even love, how ultimately we are alone. And Spike's suspicions are interesting, as are Willow's increasing recklessness in anticipation of her imminent rescue. The entire thing played very well and I enjoyed this chapter very much. A perfect Mother's Day Gift. And a happy one to you if you are one, Elen. Thanks! :-)

Author's Response: I'll take your happy Mother's Day even though I don't have any children with thanks. I'm kind of blown away by the poem, and the praise. Thank you.

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Reviewer: Sara Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: 14/05/04 Title: Chapter 25: Chapter Twenty-Six

Excellent chapter - loved the suspense, was surprised by the end result. The sudden escape attempt was wonderful. I can't help but think as Willow makes these decisions on the fly that I'd be making all the wrong decisions and wouldn't last a day with Spike. I like the way your mind works. Please don't leave us waiting to find out what happens next.

Author's Response: She has had a pretty good run or near success, but she has an advantage--Willow represents Spike's only leverage to pry the Gem of Amara out of Sunnydale. He's not going to kill her. Chapter 27 is in beta now.

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Reviewer: Sara Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: 14/06/04 Title: Chapter 26: Chapter Twenty-Seven

I have to make this quick but I loved the long additon to the story. As others have said, Pete's fascination with Buffy, his take on how she probably slays vamps, was wonderful. Spike and Willow in the car and in the hotel, all the little details that make it all so much fun to read and really set the stage for whatever else may happen. Willow's indecision about where her best interests lie, her realization that her friends might not actually rescue her, that she might be on the losing end of a cipher were heartwrenching and clever. Hope for more soon - I'm so strung out on this story, waiting is just torture now. Thanks!

Author's Response: Chapter 28 is up. I'm a little concerned that the overall tone has gotten a bit depressing.

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Reviewer: Sara Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: 28/06/04 Title: Chapter 28: Chapter 29

Again, perfect. I still sometimes get confused about what body parts are where, but not to quibble. Loved Harmony's plan to de-minionize herself. I'm with Georgia - the funniest thing I ever heard, and frankly I can't begin to imagine where you come up with this stuff. :-) The trip to CVS was another little reality touch that I appreciated. I'm in LA and we tend to think Walmart is the Great Satan here and I get annoyed when it rears it's ugly head in fic after fic. Thre are other stores people! At least here there is, so yeah, thanks for the CVS mention. The Bates Hotel disagreement was nice too, as was the entire interaction at the rest stop diner. I also loved Willow's insight into Angel/Angelus and the need for some job to do, and Spike's surprise at it. I loved both Spike's and Willow's private thoughts about what it would mean if Spike turned Willow, especially Willow's insight into that possibility. And last I loved the dawining realization on Spike's part that Willow might enjoy it a little less gently, and Willow's response, all furious but caught in it. I think you played that one out just right. You frighten me girl - I'm coming to think there is just nothing about human nature that gets past you. Anyway, it was a wonderful addition to the tale and I am very much looking forward to more. Thanks!

Author's Response: Hi, Sara! I started working with a second beta on this chapter, and I forgot to thank her. I want to thank Claudia_yvr, who writes the most wonderfully detailed notes, and Kat, who has slogged through all of ED and Odalisque, and Shannon over at Shades of Gray who did the first beta on ED a year ago. We were talking about the CVS use because it isn't the most obvious thing if you haven't been to CVS that it is a drugstore.

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Reviewer: Sara Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: 28/06/04 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter One

Oh! And not depressing at all. Not a bit. There's enough meat and honesty and real emotion and wonderful humor to make this worth a good read withouit becoming all maudlin or cringeworthy or make you want to put a bullet in your head. Please don't worry about it being depressing. I've never thought it was even once. Willow's responses to her situation and Spike's parries back, along with all the little interactions between other characters, like Oz and his band, or Pete, Collin, and Georgia, keep this one from becoming too much down. Even Giles' misery in the van on the way to the big rescue lifted the story higher than any ordinary 'woman in danger movie of the week' issue it could have deflated into. There's nothing here like that. Thanks for this one, it is truly one of my favorites.

Author's Response: That's good to know. I'm in a slightly depressed place in my head and I'd like to keep it there.

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Reviewer: Sara Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: 05/07/04 Title: Chapter 29: Chapter 30

All aglow here. And hey! I was able to keep track of what body parts went where, so that's better. :-) Loved this installment, and especially the Angel and Giles ponderings. Especially Giles'. I was surprised that Willow admitted her fear to Spike, and that was so sad. Thanks for the update, and please make the next one soon. I'm very dependent on them. :-)

Author's Response: There are two more chapters out to beta and I'm working on the two that follow that. Getting closer to an ending! Promise!

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