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Eighteen Days by Elen starstarstarstarstar [ - ]
Chapter One--A Cautionary Tale of World Save-age. It isn't NC-17 yet, but I thought I'd better make it NC-17 to be on the safe side. All of the email addresses used for Willow, her friends and parents were made up for this story. Please don?t use them!
Willow/Spike
Characters: Spike, Willow - Genres: Action/Adventure, Romance - Rating: NC-17 - Warnings: Spoilers for BtVS S2, Spoilers for BtVS S3, Spoilers for BtVS S1 - Chapters: 33
Published: 30/01/04 - Updated: 10/10/04 - Completed: No

Reviewer: Sara Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: 03/02/04 Title: Chapter 3: Chapter Three

I am deeply impressed with this story. The attention to detail is wonderful, and I think you have really captured Spike and Willow perfectly. I can't wait to see what happens next. Here's hoping updates are frequent and the story is long. Valkyrn

Author's Response: More to come? Yep. It's about three-quarters complete at 180 pages.

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Reviewer: Sara Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: 16/02/04 Title: Chapter 6: Chapter Seven

Once again, you've hit it dead on. This interlude between Spike and Willow was perfection. All the little details, and Spike's voice is absolutely perfect. Loved the ending part as well - Thanks for this. Update soon please. :-) Valkyrn

Author's Response: Chapters Three and Seven really gave me fits. I thought Chapter Seven was a little too precious. I'm glad it worked.

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Reviewer: Sara Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: 18/03/04 Title: Chapter 12: Chapter Thirteen

The last two chapters are excellent. Oz' talk with the band was brilliant, and Spike's conversation with Willow was likewise wonderful. You have a great feel for their voices and all the little details that make the story come to life. Thanks. Update soon please. :-) Valkyrn

Author's Response: Chapter . . . something, I keep loosing track of what chapter I'm on, is up. I'm so glad that Oz's interaction with the band has worked. I really enjoyed writing for them.

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Reviewer: Sara Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: 28/03/04 Title: Chapter 14: Chapter Fifteen

Excellent and wonderfully long addition to the story. The suspense was wonderful, love the menace and all the little details. Thank you.

Author's Response: Thanks! I'm glad this chapter has been as well received as it has been, because it is long and a little uneven and I couldn't figure out anyway to break it up.

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Reviewer: Sara Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: 04/04/04 Title: Chapter 16: Chapter Seventeen

What she said, except I've really liked it all along. But these last two chapters have been my favorites by far. The detail is astonishing and beautiful (love Georgia's bed, btw!) but whereas in the first chapters it was almost clinical in it's execution, here you've evolved into a seamless construct that doesn't detract from the mood of the story, it just adds to the pure taste and feel of the whole. Wonderful stuff. Love Spike's interaction with Willow again, the sex scene was brilliantly executed and at no part did you take the easy cliched road which most authors do. Magnificent tension and unerringly accurate attention to details of thought and physicality. My favorite line so far, in anything I've ever read, was the description of sex as, and I paraphrase here, watching a bead of sweat roll off your boyfriend's shoulder and hit you in the eye! My god that was inspired. Personally, I can't relate to that but I could completely understand it and that was the beauty of the thing. Just fantastic. The interaction among the band was brilliant also. Your talent is amazing, and I can't wait to read more. Thank you for sharing this with us. Valkyrn

Author's Response: Wow. Thank you for noticing my bead of sweat! I really like writing for the boys and I feel like Harmony is a much more interesting character than I gave her credit for being when I dumped her in chapter one to take advantage of some dialog that I swiped from an episode.

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Reviewer: Sara Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: 04/04/04 Title: Chapter 14: Chapter Fifteen

And as to your commenrts about chapter 15 being very long and uneven, I don't agree. Yes it was long, but I honestly don't think it would have played out had it been broken up and I did not find it uneven at all. The menace and tension and buildup to the final scene played out as they must in order to bridge to the extraordinary tale which continues in chapters 16 and 17. It was wonderful to have so much to bite into. Thanks!

Author's Response: Thanks for the reassurance about Chapter 15, but I don't think I'll ever incorporate lyrics in a story like that again. Its the one thing about that chapter that I hated and I couldn't figure out how to write around.

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Reviewer: Sara Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: 05/04/04 Title: Chapter 16: Chapter Seventeen

Well, I do agree about song lyrics. I always sigh when I see them in a story, as I know it's going to be a long haul through them. In this instance it was well done, but I can do without them without a doubt. They did serve a purpose here though - which rarely happens in fanfic - which was to distract Willow sufficiently from the horror that was happening to her, a focus for her to concentrate on. That I thought was psychologically insightful. But in fiction song lyrics, even perfectly contemplated and executed, do bog things down. If that doesn't happen again, I won't complain. :-)

Author's Response: I did a lot of waitressing when I was in college, and I used to marvel at how alien an environment a club can be. The lights are low and the music is too loud, and I used to think that I'd enjoy waitressing so much more if I was as drunk as my customers. So, yeah, that was kind of the feeling I was going for.

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Reviewer: Sara Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: 10/04/04 Title: Chapter 17: Chapter Eighteen

Excellent update. I again love the band interaction, it's fun to read. Harmony is also quite good here. Thanks, and keep em coming okay? Vallkyrn

Author's Response: I owe Medea's Master and Minions series a tremendous debt for giving me some insights into Harmony. If you haven't read this series, please treat yourself.

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Reviewer: Sara Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: 11/04/04 Title: Chapter 18: Chapter Nineteen

Okay, first off from the end of the last chapter, interesting scene with Giles angry with Willow for being stupid enough to get kidnapped. Since he doesn't know how it happened and is making assumptions, it could work it's way into a later development when Willow is returned home. Assuming she is, of course. Second, this chapter is wonderful. Willow's negotiations with Spike, trying to think through all the ramifications of a deal but being too innocent really to understand them all, and Spike rolling with it, knowing all of the possible loopholes involved here - loved that. Thanks for the wonderful Easter present. Hope more is coming soon. Valkyrn

Author's Response: I was writing After Eighteen Days stuff the same day I added the Angel/Giles section. This is definately Willow's deal with the devil moment, and I think it illustrates a basic difference between Willow and Buffy. I can imagine no circumstance where Buffy would agree to something like this. She thinks in absolutes, while Willow is much more introspective and sees the world in a more nuanced way that sometimes gets her into trouble.

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Reviewer: Sara Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: 12/04/04 Title: Chapter 19: Chapter Twenty

Wow, that was quite a mind game going on there. Excellent addition to the tale. Sold herself, did she? His viewpoint on it is interesting. Let's see if she can see it for what it really is. Thanks for the frequent updates. Can't wait to see what happens next.

Author's Response: Yeah, even I wanted to slap him, and I wrote it. Credit for the frequent updating also goes to my fabulous beta reader, and fellow baseball masochist, the fabulous Kat. Thanks for the feedback. You always pick out things that make me do a little chair dance. Thanks!

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