Reviews For How?
Reviewer: Lucinda Signed [Report This]
Date: 28/07/05 - 03:48 pm Title: How?
Not a bad idea, but it wouldn't hurt to flesh it out a little more. A few more details and descriptions, get a little more into what's going through Willow's head - is she thinking about memories of when Oz was still there? Grieving - in painful detail? Is the bottle large or small, over-the-counter or prescription?
Reviewer: Sara Signed [Report This]
Date: 01/01/04 - 07:10 pm Title: How?
Well, the story itself has promise, but when you combine the song lyrics - which seemed to be most of the body of the story - with the shortness of it I think there is too much happening to handle in such a short piece. I guess I'd prefer to see more build up of plot and escalation of emotion before the big finish. If it continues in this way I wouldn't read it further. If it settles down into some more developed plot and dialogue then I am very interested in it. I hope this helps. I am not trying to be negative, but a review is useless if it's dishonest and offers no actual feedback. Obviously some others really liked it as it is, so perhaps there is a happy audience for this just as it is. Thank you for sharing it with us. Putting out your fiction is a big deal and I am very grateful for those who do so and provide us with new tales to take in and consider. Happy New Year too! I'll be back to see chapter two.
Reviewer: Erica01 Signed [Report This]
Date: 01/01/04 - 03:08 am Title: How?
I my I actually cried at the end of this. It was short but very, very powerful. I really enjoyed it.